Question by Evehr: Rate my poem from one to ten?
the gears keep turning
a soothing sound
the screws are held tightly
keeps everything bound
the machine runs swiftly
no flaws to be found
when a screw comes loose
things stop turning round
the music-box song
makes a deafening pound
once it comes loose
it’s all hopeless now
the music’s destroyed
it falls broken down.

Also, how would you interpret it?

Best answer:

Answer by – alexaa.j
I’m a huge fan of your writing now ! (:
Honestly, I adore your poems. I get so caught up in them.
This is so beautiful ! Here’s my interpretation:
I can relate to it by trying to hold everything together. “The screws are held tightly, keeps everything bound” meaning that “the music box” or well, a certain human who may be having a hard time and hiding it, is containing itself very carefully. “No flaws to be found” meaning that there are flaws, but they’re undiscovered, therefore hidden. “When a screw comes loose, things stop turning ’round” – a screw coming loose represents one more obstacle or downfall has a large impact. The “music box” completely shuts down, broken. I LOVE LOVE LOVEEE THIS. I love how it represents being tenacious, too. Just… pulling through everything, carrying on. And the negative things that have great impacts on you.

TEN TEN TENNN! Thanks for giving me the experience of reading such a wondeeeeerful poem ! (:

Give your answer to this question below!

For school, I have to write a poem about writing, and what it was to us. Here is mine. I don’t feel it’s quite right so I’d really appreciate some advice or opinions. Thanks!

I weave together words, leaving a verdict in my wake
Filling the pauses with a melodic noise.
Syllables are the metronome, the tic-tock that pounds out each mistake
Until the machine hums out the beauty beholden in my choice.
Reflected in myself, I see the people I create
It’s from my mind–my rib they’re made.
Fermenting there, that’s where they grate
Until somewhere on paper they have strayed.
Innate gears tremble, tumbling under the weight
Left by the mass amount words,
Reorganizing themselves, until they stand straight
Organized to a v in the way of soaring birds.
For its structure that imprisons me, grammar is the bind
That shakes as the digits hit the keys,
For this is the monster, I find myself entwined
Much too wrapped up in, too in love with, to ever leave.

here it is, its supposed to include metaphors, which I think I included….Oh well, please rate! thnx =P

The day you were put into this earth,
You were bound to experience something,
To experience something you never would wish,
A horrible horrible something,

You would wish and wish for it not to happen all day long,
But it’s really not that horrific,
You will be crushed when it’s done,
Devastated to be more specific,

It is a black cloud hovering over our heads,
It is a nightmare that makes us toss and turn in our beds,
Its name sends chills right up your spine,
If you think about it too hard you might start crying,

It’s a big mean monster hiding in your closet,
Waiting to jump out and scare you,
You try to stop it, you try to pause it,
But its done, he already ate you,

The name of this monster is Death,
And it’s a very powerful thing,
With his red beady eyes and his sharp pointed scythe,
It is the ultimate killing machine.
BTW, im in 8th grade, if that helps you with rating…

The gears keep turning,
a soothing sound

The screws are held tightly,
keeps everything bound

The machine runs slowly
no flaws to be found

When a screw comes loose,
things stop turning round

The music box song
makes a deafening pound

Once in comes loose,
It becomes hopeless now

It’s all been destroyed
it falls broken down.

Criticism?
And what do you think this poem is about?
Thanks in advance.

the gears keep turning
a soothing sound
the screws are held tightly
keeps everything bound
the machine runs swiftly
no flaws to be found
when a screw comes loose
things stop turning round
the music-box song
makes a deafening pound
once it comes loose
it’s all hopeless now
the music’s destroyed
it falls broken down.

Also, how would you interpret it?