Question by Aspira: Do you know who Elizabeth Báthory was? Poem about her and her doings, can you c/c please?
The Blood Stained Purification-I’m not a historical genius so this is based on what I know about her, like tale of how this could have happened.
The Bathory family were an aristocratic generation
holding high influence in the large Hungary nation.
A dark red blotch stained their lustrous family tree,
something evil produced, 17th of August, 1560.
A sweet little child living in the stately Ecsed estate,
with passion for studies, she had a bright looking fate.
Whoever could predict a girl with such studious sense
would ever have the heart to do such brutal offense.
As the countess grew into an brilliant, intelligent woman,
her self consciousness blossomed and she began
to look into the signs of age present on her face.
Her plan formed, it would keep her young but kill her grace.
The Bathory family always remained militant and stalwart,
sneaking into the armory, she grabbed blades, deadly sort.
Unseen and away she crept as her plan resumed to work,
as she realises the simplicity she smiled a sinister smirk.
Always led on by tales of far fetched myth and legend,
she knew that girls would meet their untimely end.
In her hand a blade snipping the jugular veins,
her first victim now hung in the tower in binding chains.
The bath tub was filled with spilt blood to the brim,
extracted from a process hair raisingly grim.
the tub’s rim was telltale red from the scarlet pour,
but no one was to notice with her husband in the war.
As the years progressed the country faced more death,
but no one knew who was stealing their last breath.
Elizabeth Bathory retained her youthful sheen,
and no one knew how she was a killing machine.
She looked about 30 but her age was much higher,
rumours started to spread, was she a vampire?
1610 saw a properly held criminal investigation
from outspoken fears and rising frustration.
After the quickly held trial and rushed decision
she was put under house arrest with no true precision.
In a huge castle she had many-a-room,
but maybe through karma, she would meet her doom.
In her area she was found dead, youngish at fifty four,
when buried in the local cemetary there was much uproar.
“A murderer in our graveyard, what a total disgrace!”,
so finally she was laid to rest, in her first living place.
This is my third long poem in a row, next will probably be something short and sweet, but I guess it depends!
I like youngish because you wouldn’t say a 54 year old woman is youthful for her death, you could say she was youngish for her death, but you’re right there are definitely better ways of expressing it.
King of Agartha-Of course you may! I’m flattered, next time just do it don’t ask permission, I don’t have many rules regarding my poetry, just don’t publish it.
I have a sense of enticement? I really have no idea what i’d like to do but I might find out more about that!
Best answer:
Answer by Fight Fair! <33
Elizabeth Bathory is arguably one of the few female sex killers documented. She was extremely disturbed. I like the poem, it tells her story with a flare, the only thing I suggest is change the “youngish” to “youthful”
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